That missing nothing

I don't know what to think. The Dreams in the Witch House, and actually all of the later things have been generally more well-written. I'm not distracted by character or plot elements, but something of the atmosphere is definitely missing. I think the focus on tangible concepts and events is a big part of this. I think about The White Ship or Erich Zann - where the struggle is mostly internal - or at least a psychologist would attempt to to convince one that the struggle is internal -- but then something externalizes it. Even From Beyond is an excellent example of the internal struggle externalized. So while the Witch House has all of the elements of a really scary story, I think it's missing the internal struggle and focuses on the externalization of the events which (really?) are internal.
The Evil Clergyman and The Book are really just lacking development. The Clergyman is like a full short story with all of the important (read: scary) bits edited out and The Book is just an exposition - there's no development and the climax happens before the story even started. It could have been great: a character who doesn't know if the event he's relating are past, present or future. It would be a nightmare to try and organize into a comprehensible text, but if it succeeded, it would be amazing.